Writing Essay Revision

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The original work is post in the attached file, here is the comment: Enthymeme is properly formatted. The introduction is too long – it should introduce the main idea and then you should develop your argument in body paragraphs. There needs to be a counterargument in its own paragraph, followed by your response in the next paragraph. As you revise, you should work to eliminate frequent mistakes in phrasing and word choice.

Need to one counterargument paragraph. The grading rubric is here: , total word count for the whole essay is 1500.

Criteria Ratings Pts

This criterion is linked to a Learning OutcomeThe EnthymemeDoes the introduction contain a clearly stated, well-worded enthymeme? Does the enthymeme make an assertion which can be argued? Is the enthymeme logically sound?

15.0 pts

Excellent

Enthymeme is complex, original, logical, and structurally sound and answers a question at issue.

13.0 pts

Good

Enthymeme is in the correct form, clear, explained well, and answers a question at issue.

11.0 pts

Satisfactory

Enthymeme is vague, has problems with its logic or form. Doesn’t answer a question at issue.

8.0 pts

Needs Work

No enthymeme. The paper lacks focus.

15.0 pts

This criterion is linked to a Learning OutcomeSupporting EvidenceDoes the body of the paper support the enthymeme by providing arguments, reasons, and evidence? Does the paper engage at least two sources? Are quotes adequately introduced and explained? Does the essay fairly respond to at least one counter-argument?

30.0 pts

Excellent

Evidence cited is insightful, quotes are fully explained, paper engages relevant sources, and addresses a counter-argument

28.0 pts

Good

Each point is supported by specific and relevant examples.

26.0 pts

Satisfactory

The evidence is too general and may be repetitive. Some points are unsupported. Some examples don’t relate to the enthymeme.

20.0 pts

Needs Work

No examples given to support the argument.

30.0 pts

This criterion is linked to a Learning OutcomeOrganizationDoes the paper have a logical and cohesive structure? Does each paragraph have a topic sentence that connects to the enthymeme? Are there smooth transitions between paragraphs?

20.0 pts

Excellent

Paragraphs have clear topic sentences, smooth transitions, making for a cohesive, complex, and articulate argument.

18.0 pts

Good

Clear and cohesive structure to the paper with topic sentences and transitions. Argument is developed logically.

16.0 pts

Satisfactory

Paragraphs lack full cohesion. Transitions between points are needed. Topic sentences could be improved.

13.0 pts

Needs Work

Paper is unfocused. Paragraphs are not organized logically. Points are unrelated to the enthymeme.

20.0 pts

This criterion is linked to a Learning OutcomeRevisionIs this a genuine revision of your first version? Did you seriously address the structural and thematic concerns of the first version? Did you revise more than just punctuation, grammar, and usage errors?

15.0 pts

Excellent

This is a genuine revision of the first version that reconsiders and makes major changes to the content and organization based on the first version comments.

13.0 pts

Good

This is a good revision of the first version that addresses most of the feedback on the first version.

11.0 pts

Satisfactory

This version addresses some of the major concerns. May contain only editorial (stylistic and mechanical) revisions.

9.0 pts

Needs Work

There has been no revision from the first version.

15.0 pts

This criterion is linked to a Learning OutcomeMechanics and StyleIs the language free of jargon, slang, and clichés? Do the sentences vary in length and structure? Are the grammatical and punctuation errors minimal, or do they interfere with the clarity of your writing?

15.0 pts

Excellent

Language is clear, precise, free of jargon, slang, and clichés. Sentences vary in length and structure. No mechanical errors in grammar, punctuation, and spelling.

13.0 pts

Good

Most sentences are clear, unambiguous, and connect logically to preceding sentences. Sentences could be more varied. Very few mechanical errors.

11.0 pts

Satisfactory

Some sentences are awkward. Language may be vague or ambiguous. Some mechanical errors.

9.0 pts

Needs Work

Sentences are difficult to understand. Words are misused. Many mechanical errors.

15.0 pts

This criterion is linked to a Learning OutcomeFormat, Citation, LengthDoes the paper follow the MLA format instructions? Did you properly cite all your sources following MLA format? Does the paper meet the length requirement?

5.0 pts

Excellent

Paper follows MLA format and all sources are correctly cited in MLA format. The paper meets the length requirement.

4.0 pts

Good

Paper follows MLA format and most sources are cited correctly. Paper meets length requirement.

2.0 pts

Needs Work

Paper is formatted incorrectly and most sources are not cited correctly. Paper is shorter than required

0.0 pts

Incomplete

Paper is not formatted in MLA. Sources aren’t cited. Paper is significantly shorter than required.

5.0 pts

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