This paper needs significant revisions. Teacher made a lot of comments, but here are some general observations:
1. The Problem Statement does not include sources that specifically document your problem, which is obesity among people with IDD due to poor eating habits and a need for behavioral interventions to help them change their eating habits.
2. The Goal Statement section has too many references that really belong in a Problem Statement.
3. You haven’t described an actual intervention. What kind of training do you propose offering? How will it be delivered? To whom? What are you creating?
4. You are using a lot of academic terms that don’t quite make sense. There is no “cohort” in your proposal, for example. There are other places where the language you are using, i.e. “leveraging education and research”, does not make sense. I encourage you to use simple and direct language to describe what you intend to describe.
Rubric for Project:
1. Problem Statement (300 word limit)
- Define the problem or need. What is the problem faced by the community this organization serves that is not currently be met? The funder is not interested in paying for you to replicate a service, resource or action that is already being done.
- Cite 1 – 3 sources which document this problem. This is not a research paper. Keep this part short and to the point, but you do need some evidence that there is a problem. Include the references in a reference list at the end of the proposal.
2. Goals and Objectives of your proposed program (300 word limit)
- What is the goal of the intervention or activity that you are proposing you will do? In other words, what is the main outcome to be achieved if they give you the money? You most likely will have only have one goal, since this is a small grant.
- List at least one specific objective for each goal that you name. These are more specific, concrete, action-oriented steps you will take to meet the goal.
- Make SURE that your goals and objectives match the funder’s priorities. After listing the goals/objectives, explain how achieving them will meet the priorities of the funder.
3. Description of the Intervention/Activity (800 words)
- Be complete, but brief. This is hard to do. After writing your initial draft, go through it to see how many words you can remove and if there are unnecessary details that can be deleted.
- This part has to make sense and be very organized. Have others read it and tell you what they think you are planning to do. If what they say is off-base, then you haven’t done a good job of explaining your proposed actions.
- Write in a direct style. For example, “If I receive the funding, I will use the money to create an 8-hour, online training module that will be hosted on the organization’s platform. I will enroll 100 community members to complete the training at no cost to them. etc…”
4. Sustainability Statement (300 word limit)
- Funders care that the project will continue beyond the the short-term funding. Once you use up the money that they have given you, how will the project continue?
- You want to create a program that has a lasting impact in some form. What can you do to ensure that the project continues beyond the funding cycle? Will you establish a revenue stream for it? Will you be training other people within the organization to continue the project? Will it yield any changes in policies or infrastructure that will be lasting?
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