This is a revision essay, only need to fixed the parts mentioned by my professor. Total need to be 4 full pages. My original work is post in the attached file.
Here is the writing requirement :
- Be the artist! Choose an artist and write a letter from their perspective about an object that they created (you need to pretend you are the artist). Include an analysis about the object’s formal, historical, and contextual information. Minimum 4 pages of text. This project could be done in pairs to create dialogue in the project!
Here is my professor’s comment ” These are things that needs to be fixed- da Vinci did not invent Pointillism, and since you do not cite it I am not sure where you got that information from.
I would start your formal analysis with a basic description of the image so that your reader can picture it.
Then, I wouldn’t say what colors are NOT in the image but instead write about the colors that ARE there and describe where they are and what they represent in the image.
Then, I would write another paragraph about the pyramid composition.
The next paragraph about the background is good, but I would cut the information about her costume and put it in the contextual analysis if it fits.
I am very confused about the paragraph about the eye, are you talking about her eye of the viewer’s eye? Do you need this paragraph? If so, please explain it more. If not, delete.
In your historical analysis, I would delete the information about the theories of who and what this image is, instead I would focus on the Renaissance, what it is and how this image fits in with it. Talk about the style of this image, the style of the Renaissance and de Vinci’s style.
Your contextual analysis is the weakest section. I would focus either of the costume idea or the theories behind who this woman in and why it was commissioned. Personally, I think you should talk about Renaissance portraiture at the time and discuss how this image is similar or different. use another painting to compare and contrast if want.
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