Dear writer:
please help me to edit the paper in the attachment within 24 hours, this paper got low grade, please following the requirement and comment to do big revision including content and grammar. Thank you so much. Please try to reach 600 words.
topic: How wealthy are the 50 wealthiest people in Canada? Who are they? What is their income compared to the national average income? Compare it to the poorest deciles as well. What does this tell you about Canadian society?
Comment from pro:
1,Need to edit for clarity. For example, “Galen Weston, as the second wealthiest people in Canada,” should read person.
2. You have many grammar and structural errors.
3, the information is good but the lack of clarity is a problem.
4, Also, could expand your analysis. For example, “The super-rich people are becoming wealthier while the lower income people remain poor” is true but does not provide an in depth analysis
thank you so much!
Thanks!
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