Teacher will need the follow ing revisions as well as the PowerPoint to mirror the paper with corrections findings. It needs to be neatly organized and designed to be in RESEARCH style FORMAT.
Professor wants the following things cleaned up and fixed to the appropriate research format and PowerPoint to match a 20 minute presentation and PowerPoint to match the data in the research paper.
Grammer and paragraph spacing needs to be on point. Sentences should make complete sense for a Master Degree Quality paper. PLEASE FIX ALL BELOW and the POWERPOINT to sound like a well versed research paper. The whole structure of paper needs to make sense. (FONT is 11 point) (SPACING 1.5) Paragraphs have to be adjusted as below please.
1) At some point, you start with this sentence “As described earlier in this research report, the study conducted collected qualitative data from one-on-one interviews.” And then you continue commenting on some of your results, but then you start explaining your Research Design. The results are rarely discussed before you describe the research design. The discussion of the results comes after and then you connect to your research questions.
2) Why do you have a “Research Design” and a “Research Methodology Design” separately?
3) Give your text format by justifying the text and by adding spaces among paragraphs and subheaders.
4) In your conclusions you say ” “Qualitative data were collected through four focus groups and one dyadic interview. The findings of the qualitative data analysis revealed nine themes: respectful, compassionate, effective communicator, experienced, effective delegator, gives recognition, sociable, emotionally controlled, organized”. I can’t find these immediately, and you pass from one topic to another, meaning that subheaders are needed example:
X. Analysis of the interviews
Description, explanation of each of the themes (do these connect to your questions and literature?)
X.X Respect
In the interviews, we found that the employees respect their bosses because… For example, as stated by Interviewee No. 1 “My boss makes me feel like I’m valued and I respect his leadership style”
X.XX Compassion
X.XXX Effective Communication
Etc.
5) Verify that your conclusions are not fixed with your limitations or future consideration. Conclusions refer exclusively to what you’ve learned during the process, what you’ve found, etc. Check this video: https://youtu.be/TWsXViNerKs
6) You wrote “Like many college students, I am unsure of my future professional path. I do know, however, that at one point, I want to own my own company.” In this sense: 6.1) There are still some personal pronouns and similar along with your paper, remember to keep it as objective as possible. 6.2) Your comment is valid, but it is better to change its location. If you want to divide the conclusions with an additional section called “Personal reflections” or something similar, you can add it here, along with your other personal comments. Remember that this paper it’s to be thought and carried out as a professional paper.
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