Revise based on what is provided and too much so that it’s super drastic besides changing the design. This is the link to make revison on or use to take the put the inmortaion into a better design https://docs.google.com/document/d/1XPjTGQG8zcUXw8…
Rhetorical Awareness – 4. As I noted early in the project, you need to think about what the document (in its finished form) is designed to accomplish and focus the project around that purpose. A lot of what you discuss here is your intention/goals for the project *before* you wrote it, not what it ends up actually doing.
Stance – 3. Related to the above point, there needs to be a more specific and unified theme or focus for the project so that all of your content here builds toward an implication or “so what” for the document. You did a lot of good work here, but why, aside from the fact that it corresponds to some of the assignment options? What does all of this accomplishment, and what does your project do with it?
Development – 3. You have a lot of good information here, but it needs to serve a more direct purpose and build toward an overall focus or conclusion for the project.
Organization – 4. Logical organization, but there needs to be more “assistance” with navigating that structure, both in terms of things like section headings but also transitions and signal phrases to indicate where things are headed and why.
Conventions – 4. Pretty conversational in tone; this sort of language should be revised to present the details of your project in a logical way. Some minor issues with clarity.
Design – 2. No attention to design.
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