Overall…good work here…your Section 4 and 5 is well written and organized…you just need to provide more detail! The detail I think is critical to understanding the veteran student’s needs as is currently missing from your discussion. Example quotes from the interviews will help. You really need to see some other published PAS and see other published dissertations (see chapter 4) to see how they have written up the description of the themes and responded to the research questions…and used examples from the interview questions. Your recommendations don’t really align with the themes identified…and themes identified are not really discussed.
Also, You need to also go back into Section 1-3, now that you have done the study and revise parts of that to make that clear. Attached is PAS will some additional comments.
Also, does the organization wish to be “masked?” if so, you need to take out their name through….PLEASE check! This is going to be a published document!
Also, make sure bibliography matches what is in the text of the PAS.
Keep working at it, but Section 4 really needs to be flushed out so that I understand what you found in your interviews.
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