Hello, I had another study pool person write my essay and it was awful and got me a 19/40. If you think you can follow the rubric and get me a good grade please help. I will put files as soon as we start the tutoring session. Below is what my teacher commented.
| Please follow MLA guidelines. Thanks. | |
| Proofread for logic. Some of the sentences don’t make sense because they are grammatically confusing or incomplete in thought. Pay attention to correct MLA citations. It appears that in the introduction, you are trying to cover too many topics. Although the topic may be broad, you need to narrow that quite a bit in order to really cover it well in such a short essay. When trying to cover so many things, you run the danger of writing a superficial essay that says a little about a lot. It’s better to say a lot about a little (fewer ideas but in greater depth). “She did not smile at me” is about the storyteller. Mentioning customer service is nonsensical. The “devil” reference is a misunderstanding of the text. Work on transitions between ideas please. “it does not lack loop” what does that mean? The last three sources cited are insufficient/incomplete. |
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