Attached are they instructions of the essay and the first draft I wrote. Also, I’ll attach the feedback that was given on the first draft. They articles that are needed for the essay will be attached too. Please, work from the draft and write the final compare and contrast essay. The articles are:
org/headlines/defund-the-police-top-3-pros-and-cons/”>https://www.procon.org/headlines/defund-the-police…
https://www.brookings.edu/blog/how-we-rise/2021/05/19/7-myths-about-defunding-the-police-debunked/
These are the feedback that was provided:
Take out the sentence that starts “three thoughtful…” and the other sentence in the introduction about the articlues. The purpose of the essay is not to evaluate the articles but rather to contraast the 2 sides. Your thesis needs some grammar work. There are lots of ligrammar mistakes. Proofread carefully. You need to work on making your sources clearer. Right now you have some plagiarism because it isint clear always what came from sources and what is your own thoughts. You need to work on your organization! You do not have point by point organization as required and you need to work on topic sentences.
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