revise the given research by fixing the grammar error and reorganizing the research to make it more organized
make sure to add transmission to make it flow
and fix the mistakes that you see regarding this research please
i will also provide some of the feedbacks that the instructor had on the rough draft
make sure to reorganize this research to make it more reasonable and connected and proffesional
feed backs:
*it needs to be reorganized to make more sense so that the paper flows.
*References: Review proper Ecology-style citation formatting
*content is all there but needs some reorganization
*Organization/Grammar: Major grammar issues. Consider taking final paper to writing center for review. Also there is not a lot of connection between subtopics in this paper, it reads as if each topic is totally unrelated and there are no transitional statements between paragraphs.
* in one of the mining paragraph, it says:
During the mining of alluvial gold, mercury’s high content is released into the environment, destroying every living thing that comes to contact with it. Peruvian Amazon rainforest is one of the leading alluvial gold mine sites.
-what does this mean? they aren’t immediately destroyed, what happens to them?
*add evidence to this : meaning a paper that is peer reviewed to this paragraph to support it
Biodegradation
The destruction of the forest also means the destruction or loss of habitat for mammal and other animal species. About 70% of animals and plants have their natural home in the rainforest and are losing their habitat to overharvesting. Generally, the loss of habitat for mammals and other animals’ species results in biodiversity loss. Mammals have also been deprived of the opportunity to interact freely with their mates for reproduction, thus lowers the chances of survival and sustainability of various animal species. Loss of biodiversification results in the imbalance of the ecosystem. Which leads to over-dependence on some parts of the rainforest.
* you can extend on some of the ideas if it was needed
*fix all citations to ecology format: do not capitalize titles except for proper nouns and start of title.
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