Cuyamaca College Black Lives Matter versus All Lives Matter Essay

I provided two articles that deals with essay or the research and I’m going to provide the annotated bibliographies and the draft that 2 different tutors did it for me but completely wrong what they did. So please read everything carefully before your start working on it. I have this essay due on Saturday May 22, 2021 it must be done by this time please and I want you to follow the information very well and follow the steps when you start working on the essay because I’m not trying to receive zero on this assignment. The topic of this essay is “Black Lives Matter” but if you wanted to change the topic totally is fine as long as deals with the guidelines information. I will provide all the information’s that deals with the essay and please follow the guidelines that the professor wants in the essay. There is important thing as well once you finish writing the whole essay I want you to write annotated bibliographies of the whole essay you going to write but I want the annotated bibliographies in separate paper from the essay and I will provide the information for that as well. Also, I want you to write essay draft paper on the whole essay you going to write and I want the draft to be in separate paper as well and I will provide the information for it. But please please do not start on the assignment until your 100% sure you understand what I want.

Argument Research Paper

100 point,

• Three to five pages, not including the Works Cited page
• Works Cited page with at least five sources that you have found
  • The five sources may include the three sources that you created for your annotated bibliography unless you are not going to use those sources.
  • Only include on the Works Cited page those sources you use in your paper.
• MLA format

OVERVIEW

Your research paper will explore a movement that you are interested in, and discuss an aspect of the movement that you have an opinion on. With information from your sources, you will argue for your opinion. To create a fair, unbiased paper, you will also discuss the opposing view or counterargument of your opinion.

The purpose of an argument research paper is to teach certain writing and thinking skills. Being able to clearly express your opinion, support it persuasively, and acknowledge the ways and reasons other points of view differ from your own is both an academic skill and a life skill.

INSTRUCTIONS

• Thoroughly review my feedback on your first draft of this paper and on your annotated bibliography.
• Review also the feedback from your classmates on the peer review discussion board.
• Read the Rubric to understand my grading criteria
• Submit your paper and the Works Cited page

A successful paper will:

• Smoothly integrate information and evidence in MLA format from reliable sources
• Explain how this information helps illustrate, clarify, extend, or complicate your argument (this is your analysis of the source material).
• Have a clear arguable thesis statement at the end of your introduction.
• Have a strong conclusion.
• Edit thoroughly so that sentences are readable and appropriate for a college-level paper. Find and fix writing errors, especially those that interfere with meaning. (Links to an external site.)
• Reach the minimum page count of 3 pages.
• Have a correctly MLA formatted Works Cited page with at least five sources.

Your final paper will be submitted to a plagiarism checker. To avoid problems you should:

• Review 8.5 about citing sources to avoid mistaken plagiarism.
• Make sure that all the sources you use in your paper are on your Works Cited page.
• Correctly cite your sources in the paper so they can be located on the Works Cited page (see 1.2).
• Always give the source, both when you use a direct quote with quotation marks and a paraphrase of information from your source.

Rubric

Argumentative Research Paper

Annotated Bibliographies on Research Paper Topic

30 points

• Create 3 annotated bibliographies
• Each on a separate page
• MLA formatted

OVERVIEW

Learning how to create an Annotated Bibliography is very useful whenever you write an essay or paper because it enables you to keep a record of your sources with information about each source that is pertinent to the topic of your paper. Carefully read the Annotated Bibliography Guidelines to learn what it is and what information you should include in it. When deciding on a protest movement, think about what you could argue. Since this is an argument research paper, consider a controversial aspect of a movement and take a position as your argument. For example, the March for our Lives movement advocates for stricter gun control laws, but many Americans claim the Second Amendment protects gun owners against any restrictions. You could argue on either side.

INSTRUCTIONS

• Decide on your research paper topic.
  • The topic will be one of the protest movements we have discussed.
  • Or, you may choose a different movement, but please check with me for approval.
• Choose reliable sources. Websites that are dot org or dot net are usually neutral, unbiased; some dot com sites are reliable, like newspapers and news outlets (CBS, PBS, NBC); online videos from YouTube or TED. Do not use Wikipedia.
• You will need to find at least five sources for your paper.
  • Choose three sources and create an annotated bibliography for each source.
• Submit three annotated bibliographies, each on a separate page.
• Follow the guidelines and example in 11.3.

This is the professor comment for the annotated bibliographies that I did please read what she wants and start with it after you finish on the whole essay.

I just sent this comment to another students because what you have written is the same as hers. You have given a summary of the sources, but these are not annotated bibliographies. If you read carefully my instructions in 11.3 about what goes into the bibliography, you will see what is missing. Your summary of the main message of the article should be no more than two or three sentences. Then you need to explain, briefly, how the information relates to your topic. Also, did you study the example in 11.3? In the prompts (11.4) it says to create 3 bibliographies. You have not done any research to find new sources, but used the ones I gave you. The main point of this assignment is for you to decide what topic/movement you will write about for your research paper and find sources for that movement. Your paper will be about one movement. Here you are discussing two different movements. In the example (11.3), you will see that the citation is just like the ones for a Work Cited page: all the information to find the source. You don’t have that information for the sources you give. I’m not going to explain here what is missing because you need to read carefully the directions in 11.3, look at the bibliography example and follow it exactly. Also, you know that you can’t have direct quotes without quotation marks. that is plagiarism. So, now, decide what movement you will write about, search for sources, create three annotated bibliographies that follow the example I’ve given you and submit for a grade. Please email me with any questions. Also, we can meet on zoom to discuss it. My regular office hours are on Wednesday, 10 to 12. Or email me with a time that is more convenient and I’ll send you a zoom link.

This is the essay draft information that you will do after you finish the whole essay.

Copy and paste your complete draft, including Works Cited page, from your Word Document and submit. Read the prompt for this draft in 13.2. You are submitting to the discussion board your three to five page research paper with Works Cited page containing at least 5 sources which include the three sources on your annotated bibliography. This means you will have at least two new sources.

• Thesis: What is the writer’s argument/thesis? Is it strongly and clearly stated in the introduction?
• Support: What evidence to support the argument is provided? (support quotes and paraphrases from sources) How does the evidence support the thesis? (Do quotes clearly relate to argument?) Is the evidence convincing? (credible sources) Offer suggestions here.
• Counterargument and refutation: Does the writer give the opposing view? Does the writer then offer a refutation to the opposing view, which reinforces the main argument?
• MLA Citation: Is each piece of evidence cited properly, both within the text of the essay and on the Works Cited page? If not, what is missing? Offer recommendations.
• Organization/structure: How does the writer connect the evidence to the thesis? (analysis of evidence) Is each piece of evidence introduced clearly and convincingly explained? Does the writing move logically from the claim to the evidence that supports it? If writing is not smooth and/or coherent (understandable), provide recommendations.
• Finally, describe the paper’s greatest strengths and one or two areas that might need work.

This is the professor comment on the draft that I did.

You are making the same mistakes, so I’ll copy my comments to her.
You have submitted two completely different assignments together. So, I’ll give you my feedback on them separately.
First, on the research paper draft assignment:
The instructions in the prompt (12.2) asked for an introductory paragraph, one body paragraph and a Works Cited page with two sources.
You have an introduction and the Works Cited page but no body paragraph.
Also, you have no thesis. The research paper is an argument paper. This means that you are arguing about some specific aspect about your topic. Your final sentence, which should be your thesis, states you will “highlight some the critiques involved in the movement and the reasons behind the criticism.”
Yes, this paper will review or describe the criticism, but only to support your argument.
So, from your research, you need to decide what you are going to argue.
In your introduction, you have a good summary of the problem that BLM seeks to address. And you identify two criticisms of the movement: disruptive protests and unwillingness to negotiate with political figures.
So, you could delete the last sentence and replace it with your thesis. Here is an argument thesis: However, the BLM movement does not focus on disruptive protests, nor is it unwilling to negotiate.
Or your thesis could claim the opposite:
In fact, the BLM movement does focus on disruptive protests, and it is unwilling to negotiate.
Now, for either argument, your paper will give evidence from the sources to prove your opinion.
About your sources. Both you and Diyana are getting sources that are not acceptable because they are only abstracts (summaries) of the article and the site doesn’t allow the whole article to be seen.
I always google the sources and if I can’t open them, they are not acceptable.
You have one source that is acceptable by Rachel Ferguson. This is an online magazine. Google your topic (like “BLM criticism for disruptive protests”) and you will get articles from magazines and newspapers. Don’t use blogs.
So, if you want full points, revise this assignment to include an arguable thesis at the end of the introduction, add a body paragraph that discusses the criticism using your sources, and revise your Works Cited list with two sources like the Ferguson article.
Submit the revision to the 12.2 Research Paper Draft assignment.
About the Annotated Bibliography (AB).
Please submit your revision into 11.4 as a separate assignment.
The first source is fine, but the annotation is incomplete. When you read carefully the instructions in 11.3, you see that the first part is about the source, then a brief description of the article and finally a sentence about what in the article you will use for your paper.
The second source is like the ones on your Works Cited page. It isn’t acceptable for the reasons I already gave you above.
Also, the assignment in 11.4 required three annotated bibliographies.
So, for this assignment, you need two more sources (that I can locate and read) and an annotation for each one that follows the guidelines in 11.3.
Let me know if you intend to revise these two assignments. If not, I’ll give you a partial grade, deducting points for the errors.