Personal essay: 780 words
I have a draft already
This is the notes:
– Missing Theoretical elements Center of the writing (Self Healing) – ( Beginning observation):
Take off: the animals part
Add: What personal experience can I put in the center of this essay that relates to the way that I think with interior ( talking about body scar)
Personal element is missing
( Move away from instructing the reader)
change the sentences where it instructs the reader into more focus on the personal experience include the personal experience as the center of the story (beginning)
1- Start (small) with the personal experience with body scar ( how did it happen)
2- Then larger and how this is more relevant
3- Go back to the personal experience ( the scar heals itself)
4- ends: what does it mean for the interior, and why would the interior want to heal? What is the future for interior (no need for answers)? Just set up the quotations for future thinking.
Center the essay about a time I, as the writer, had a scar and how does it selfheal itself
( wondering about self-healing material)
(non-scientific scientific perspective)
why might humans felt the need to create self-healing materials
why call them self-healing? Why not self-cleaning
(thinking deeply by understand human condition through interior)
Focusing on Language:
From essay: “I’m sure we would be happy if your wallpaper will be able to prepare in case of damage”
( don’t instruct with the reader let the reader come to their conclusion but guide them with your own experience)
More like: Have you been ever to a room where the wallpaper or the paint was pealing by itself, and it drove you insane
What are your memories in this room?
What does it look like?
What effect did healing have on the interior space?
Relate this to a moment when you experienced the moment of healing scar. What do you think materials such as healing glass and plastic say about the condition of interiority ( the body healing itself)?
Most the interior always be healing? connection in/biology themself my (maybe we should drive the interiors to healing themself too)
Guide the reader from a Theoretical prespictive
about a Personal experience I had (not about the importance of biomaterial material), what relationship does biomaterial dose it has with interior
(NOT: how does it apply to the interior or how it is related)
it is about everyday practice
( need of stitching the scar)
What is the material response to a cultural idea or a need in interior design:
Example:
Teasing out and questions,” why the needing of healing glass? On a practical level, that means glass won’t scratch. It will look nicer, but Does that has anything to do within since of order in space?
What is the human/cultural intention behind these ideas?
About a scar How did it happen, how long it took to heal? What does the scar means from my observation
Why/ How: does the interior needs to heal
it is not about the material choice (deeper human relationship between human and the idea of healing and home)
what does healing mean?
dose healing masking upkeep and maintenance or something else
incorporate: self-healing skin material (my skin as writer)
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