great job on your first draft. I recommend taking a look through essay indentations with MLA format guidelines to adjust your essay accordingly, and do some proofreading before you turn in your final draft to pinpoint and correct some minor errors (check your paper with Grammarly or another grammar application if you have a hard time checking for grammar yourself). This is a really interesting and informational paper on Elssler, especially her earlier life and later on global experience. I would like to see more of a description or analysis on her dancing style; what is it that she did that characterized modern style and differentiated her movements from the typical ballet style seen at the time? Also, maybe provide some insight on your end as to what captured your attention to write a paper on her: was it her impressive repertoire, her dance style, or her fashion?
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