Hello,
I have received feedback on the paper you wrote and was wondering if you could revise it and add to it. Here is the feeback
Dear Robert,
I like what you’re trying to do here, but I feel like the examples have such pervasive and diffuse metaphors that your point isn’t coming across as strongly as it could. I’m also not clear on whether these examples are more images than metaphors.
I’d suggest finding example that provide really clear simple metaphors–x is y type–that might better illustrate your point about the shift in perception. Take a look at Ars poetica that we discussed in class-that kind of really explicit metaphor would serve your purposes here.
I’m happy to talk this over with you in the next few days.
Prof Morgan
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